Personally, and I'm just speaking for myself, and I'm a curmudgeonly old man, I hate these swish, slick, things sliding in from here, there and everywhere, type of web pages.
Give me something to see, something to read, something to understand what you do, and a clear call for action in the case I'm your audience. This takes forever to get to the point, and I'm still not sure I understand what you do.
I'm probably not in your demographic, but if I can't see on the first page something, anything, to engage me, I'm out.
Pretty sure I'm not the only one. It's an impatient audience you have, and without a clear something on the first view, you've lost them.
It's gorgeous, though. Is that all you want?
Added in edit: In fact, pretty much everything I said in an earlier comment[0] applies to this too.
thanks for the honest feedback. Well, about the swish and slide, yea It's true that is more of a fancy thing than the real utility, totally agree but no, is not that all I want.
Interesting point the call to action and something to engage. I thought that the video could work, but looks like is not. Maybe I can modify the first "page" in:
We love vinyl records
Join us and start sharing your collection.
True as well that is not clear what Needle is, a social network. Is not mentioned, I need to clarify this as well.
We got and endless to do list on server and app, and I'm totally into the project since long time so I guess I'm loosing my focus from the users view.
Love Vinyl?
Share your collection ...
Find new possibilities ...
Connect with other vinyl lovers ...
... then draw them onwards. You need to be like a Dan Brown novel, short chapters that always finish on a cliff-hanger, leaving the reader wanting to read on, unwilling to stop, wondering what happens next.
Remember, these are just my thoughts, and I'm probably not in your demographic. Take the comments and try to see it from the view of a potential user who has no idea what you do. That's hard.
That's clearer - yes. It's not obvious that you can scroll, and the colors feel a bit, well, wishy-washy - flat and insipid. Some people prefer that, but I like something crisper.
The text "The social network for vinyl records lovers." gives an immediate sense of what it's about, but I'd like to see it take a more prominent role - it gets a little lost in the color scheme.
But I think it's a real improvement. Do you think it's better? Given the questions I was asking initially, do you think it now better meets the goals of a landing page? Does it need to have the words "Share", "Discover", "Uncover", "Surprise", "Adventure", or something else to create curiosity?
Those are random thoughts - I haven't time for more. Good luck.
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Clickety click ... http://test.bluetouchdev.com/
Personally, and I'm just speaking for myself, and I'm a curmudgeonly old man, I hate these swish, slick, things sliding in from here, there and everywhere, type of web pages.
Give me something to see, something to read, something to understand what you do, and a clear call for action in the case I'm your audience. This takes forever to get to the point, and I'm still not sure I understand what you do.
I'm probably not in your demographic, but if I can't see on the first page something, anything, to engage me, I'm out.
Pretty sure I'm not the only one. It's an impatient audience you have, and without a clear something on the first view, you've lost them.
It's gorgeous, though. Is that all you want?
Added in edit: In fact, pretty much everything I said in an earlier comment[0] applies to this too.
[0] https://news.ycombinator.com/item?id=7839799
Hello Colin,
thanks for the honest feedback. Well, about the swish and slide, yea It's true that is more of a fancy thing than the real utility, totally agree but no, is not that all I want.
Interesting point the call to action and something to engage. I thought that the video could work, but looks like is not. Maybe I can modify the first "page" in:
We love vinyl records Join us and start sharing your collection.
True as well that is not clear what Needle is, a social network. Is not mentioned, I need to clarify this as well.
We got and endless to do list on server and app, and I'm totally into the project since long time so I guess I'm loosing my focus from the users view.
Have something to lead the reader through ...
... then draw them onwards. You need to be like a Dan Brown novel, short chapters that always finish on a cliff-hanger, leaving the reader wanting to read on, unwilling to stop, wondering what happens next.Remember, these are just my thoughts, and I'm probably not in your demographic. Take the comments and try to see it from the view of a potential user who has no idea what you do. That's hard.
Hello Colin, I updated the website, followed some of your suggestion. Thanks!
http://test.bluetouchdev.com/
That's clearer - yes. It's not obvious that you can scroll, and the colors feel a bit, well, wishy-washy - flat and insipid. Some people prefer that, but I like something crisper.
The text "The social network for vinyl records lovers." gives an immediate sense of what it's about, but I'd like to see it take a more prominent role - it gets a little lost in the color scheme.
But I think it's a real improvement. Do you think it's better? Given the questions I was asking initially, do you think it now better meets the goals of a landing page? Does it need to have the words "Share", "Discover", "Uncover", "Surprise", "Adventure", or something else to create curiosity?
Those are random thoughts - I haven't time for more. Good luck.
Hello Colin, yes I definately think that now is better! Thanks for your suggestions