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... then draw them onwards. You need to be like a Dan Brown novel, short chapters that always finish on a cliff-hanger, leaving the reader wanting to read on, unwilling to stop, wondering what happens next.
Remember, these are just my thoughts, and I'm probably not in your demographic. Take the comments and try to see it from the view of a potential user who has no idea what you do. That's hard.
That's clearer - yes. It's not obvious that you can scroll, and the colors feel a bit, well, wishy-washy - flat and insipid. Some people prefer that, but I like something crisper.
The text "The social network for vinyl records lovers." gives an immediate sense of what it's about, but I'd like to see it take a more prominent role - it gets a little lost in the color scheme.
But I think it's a real improvement. Do you think it's better? Given the questions I was asking initially, do you think it now better meets the goals of a landing page? Does it need to have the words "Share", "Discover", "Uncover", "Surprise", "Adventure", or something else to create curiosity?
Those are random thoughts - I haven't time for more. Good luck.
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... then draw them onwards. You need to be like a Dan Brown novel, short chapters that always finish on a cliff-hanger, leaving the reader wanting to read on, unwilling to stop, wondering what happens next.Remember, these are just my thoughts, and I'm probably not in your demographic. Take the comments and try to see it from the view of a potential user who has no idea what you do. That's hard.
Hello Colin, I updated the website, followed some of your suggestion. Thanks!
http://test.bluetouchdev.com/
That's clearer - yes. It's not obvious that you can scroll, and the colors feel a bit, well, wishy-washy - flat and insipid. Some people prefer that, but I like something crisper.
The text "The social network for vinyl records lovers." gives an immediate sense of what it's about, but I'd like to see it take a more prominent role - it gets a little lost in the color scheme.
But I think it's a real improvement. Do you think it's better? Given the questions I was asking initially, do you think it now better meets the goals of a landing page? Does it need to have the words "Share", "Discover", "Uncover", "Surprise", "Adventure", or something else to create curiosity?
Those are random thoughts - I haven't time for more. Good luck.
Hello Colin, yes I definately think that now is better! Thanks for your suggestions