Looks good in general, here are some potential improvements:
* You can safely drop "I'm a conversion optimization consultant." The sentence that follows is more powerful and easier to understand.
* "How I can help." – titles should not end in periods. This one as well as "Happy clients." can optionally end with a colon. There are a couple places in the text where punctuation is also incorrect, you should re-check it against English rules.
* "Conversion Optimization" should be to the left of "Funnel Tracking & Analysis" because it's simpler, IMHO.
* The bullets under "Funnel Tracking & Analysis" don't really say much about how it brings money, just what it is.
* On Chrome in OS X with standard settings, "Funnel Tracking & Analysis" is split into two lines. Layout looks a bit broken because of that.
* "How can I help?" assumes that the client knows the answer to that question. Don't intimidate them, either drop or rephrase this.
* Why no email? You can add it using javascript, and the vast majority of spam bots won't see it (google how to do that properly).
You welcome! I think "Funnel Analysis" is better. Tracking is kinda implied in the whole conversion / funnel optimization thing, and presumably the value is in analysis & optimization, not tracking per se, so that's what should be in the title.
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Looks good in general, here are some potential improvements:
* You can safely drop "I'm a conversion optimization consultant." The sentence that follows is more powerful and easier to understand.
* "How I can help." – titles should not end in periods. This one as well as "Happy clients." can optionally end with a colon. There are a couple places in the text where punctuation is also incorrect, you should re-check it against English rules.
* "Conversion Optimization" should be to the left of "Funnel Tracking & Analysis" because it's simpler, IMHO.
* The bullets under "Funnel Tracking & Analysis" don't really say much about how it brings money, just what it is.
* On Chrome in OS X with standard settings, "Funnel Tracking & Analysis" is split into two lines. Layout looks a bit broken because of that.
* "How can I help?" assumes that the client knows the answer to that question. Don't intimidate them, either drop or rephrase this.
* Why no email? You can add it using javascript, and the vast majority of spam bots won't see it (google how to do that properly).
Awesome, thank you for taking the time to write that, Nikita! All things going on to-do list.
About the "Funnel Tracking & Analysis" title... I'd love to simplify that to just "Funnel Analysis." Would that lose too much meaning?
You welcome! I think "Funnel Analysis" is better. Tracking is kinda implied in the whole conversion / funnel optimization thing, and presumably the value is in analysis & optimization, not tracking per se, so that's what should be in the title.