1) I feel like including in your limited app space/pitch "finding people of your class" is a poor indicator of your ability to market the product. While there is some way to spin the whole "find people with similar intellectual interests/career aspirations/etc.), referring to "class" specifically seems elitist, and would be poor marketing IMO.
2) In the "impressive things," Nishant wrote "getting scholarship" though it should've said "getting a scholarship."
3) The tone of the app seems childish at points (references to "fat little boy," "I want to spread love"). While it's good to not take yourself too seriously, it might've been a little too much perhaps?
4) I don't think you explained/framed very well what exactly is the problem that people are facing that you are solving. If you can draw upon some references to people really preferring to date others with similar educational/professional background or something, that would've probably helped.
Just wanted to give some constructive (but conjectural) feedback. Good luck guys! :)
I think you've hit the nail on the head with all of these. Regarding 2) there were several other grammatical errors, the second sentence for example. "It simple".
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1) I feel like including in your limited app space/pitch "finding people of your class" is a poor indicator of your ability to market the product. While there is some way to spin the whole "find people with similar intellectual interests/career aspirations/etc.), referring to "class" specifically seems elitist, and would be poor marketing IMO.
2) In the "impressive things," Nishant wrote "getting scholarship" though it should've said "getting a scholarship."
3) The tone of the app seems childish at points (references to "fat little boy," "I want to spread love"). While it's good to not take yourself too seriously, it might've been a little too much perhaps?
4) I don't think you explained/framed very well what exactly is the problem that people are facing that you are solving. If you can draw upon some references to people really preferring to date others with similar educational/professional background or something, that would've probably helped.
Just wanted to give some constructive (but conjectural) feedback. Good luck guys! :)
-> class thing specifically backfired for us but the intent was as you said "people with similar intellectual interests/career aspirations/"
Thanks for the feedback, I guess this is going on our next one.
I think you've hit the nail on the head with all of these. Regarding 2) there were several other grammatical errors, the second sentence for example. "It simple".