Thanks a lot for the feedback kyro! Your idea of headline sounds better indeed :) Regarding the amount of text, you have a point... Will try to prioritize pictures and key features. Thanks again. Best.
Also, a lot of the wording in the feature paragraphs is strange. I'm not sure if English is your second language or if you're just trying too hard to explain things. If it's the latter, just keep it simple. For example - "In Gmail, labels are placed at the very left of emails subjects. This has for main consequence to decrease the visibility of the content of your emails." The second sentence there reads like an output from Google Translate.
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Thanks a lot for the feedback kyro! Your idea of headline sounds better indeed :) Regarding the amount of text, you have a point... Will try to prioritize pictures and key features. Thanks again. Best.
Also, a lot of the wording in the feature paragraphs is strange. I'm not sure if English is your second language or if you're just trying too hard to explain things. If it's the latter, just keep it simple. For example - "In Gmail, labels are placed at the very left of emails subjects. This has for main consequence to decrease the visibility of the content of your emails." The second sentence there reads like an output from Google Translate.