Wow, I definitely wouldn't want to work for you after a statement like that.
The poetic job offer thing can be done well, but you have to actually write well for it to be appealing.. For example, you repeat "right now" twice within the first three sentences. You use the wrong "your/you're", you say "your are", and you throw commas about willy-nilly. That doesn't convey a laid-back air or a cool company culture - that conveys sloppiness and general laziness.
For reference, a good combination of poetry and information is Rapportive's hiring page : http://rapportive.com/jobs
It is designed well, makes the service, company culture, and idea clear, and then clearly states what the responsibilities and roles are. If I'm thinking about a job, or looking at a job posting, I want some information - your post gives none of that.
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Wow, I definitely wouldn't want to work for you after a statement like that.
The poetic job offer thing can be done well, but you have to actually write well for it to be appealing.. For example, you repeat "right now" twice within the first three sentences. You use the wrong "your/you're", you say "your are", and you throw commas about willy-nilly. That doesn't convey a laid-back air or a cool company culture - that conveys sloppiness and general laziness.
For reference, a good combination of poetry and information is Rapportive's hiring page : http://rapportive.com/jobs
It is designed well, makes the service, company culture, and idea clear, and then clearly states what the responsibilities and roles are. If I'm thinking about a job, or looking at a job posting, I want some information - your post gives none of that.