I just checked out the site and the copy that jumped out at me that needs revision is the sentence: "all with one clean, zippy software"
Perhaps you could revise the copy to:
"Recruiterbox is a no-nonsense recruitment tool. Publish jobs, screen resumes & track applicants - an all in one, simplified approach to recruitment . At a price that will make you smile."
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I just asked for help with http://recruiterbox.com/ Thanks for this!
I just checked out the site and the copy that jumped out at me that needs revision is the sentence: "all with one clean, zippy software"
Perhaps you could revise the copy to: "Recruiterbox is a no-nonsense recruitment tool. Publish jobs, screen resumes & track applicants - an all in one, simplified approach to recruitment . At a price that will make you smile."
Thanks for the feedback, @happybuy