EDIT: Just saw the video! I think you should delete 90% of the text you have. Make the video demo the focus. And go from there. Way you have it right now, I almost didn't see the video even after spending a minute or two on the site!
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1. Great play on salesforce no-software mantra! As someone who has had a few people intern for sales in past months, I was immediately taken in by "no sales rep headache" pitch. Resonates well, at least with me! Now, can you meet my expectations?
2. From there on, unfortunately, your pitch goes downhill. Too much text. I'd start from scratch. Use your no-sales-rep pitch to grab attention. Then have 4-5 bullet points, each explaining a problem your app fixes. And later in the page, the finer details for the people still unsure/have questions about your app.
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EDIT: Just saw the video! I think you should delete 90% of the text you have. Make the video demo the focus. And go from there. Way you have it right now, I almost didn't see the video even after spending a minute or two on the site!
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1. Great play on salesforce no-software mantra! As someone who has had a few people intern for sales in past months, I was immediately taken in by "no sales rep headache" pitch. Resonates well, at least with me! Now, can you meet my expectations?
2. From there on, unfortunately, your pitch goes downhill. Too much text. I'd start from scratch. Use your no-sales-rep pitch to grab attention. Then have 4-5 bullet points, each explaining a problem your app fixes. And later in the page, the finer details for the people still unsure/have questions about your app.
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